jwgh wrote the following, a propos nothing at all.
HMas in July
It was HMas in July
and the trout were very kilgore
It was HMas in July
and New Year's in outer space.
It was HMas in July
And we danced upon the floor
(When I say 'we danced', I mean by that
we gently twitched in place.)
In the meadow, dear Eliza
conversated with a man
In the meadow, dear Eliza
used a cookbook to respond
In the meadow, dear Eliza:
"WOULD IT PLEASE YOU IF I WERE AM
TO BE SLEEPING IN THE MEADOW?"
I responded in a song:
It was HMas in July
and the lobsters all were tired
It was HMas in July
And we wouldn't even try.
It was HMas in July
and the rockets all were fired.
And because of global warming
It was HMas in July.
Danny Sichel suggested:
Better: "And when I say 'we danced', I mean / we gently twitched in place".
Eliminate two syllables for the sake of the scansion.
to which jwgh responded:
WELL.
This is a ROKK & ROLL song, not POETRY, so scansion concerns don't
necessarily APPLY, and also I think Ik nwo what I inTENded better than
some RANDOM PERSON on the INTARNET.
On the other hand, the author's intent is by definition UNKNOWABLE,
because the AUTHOR IS DEAD (BRAAAAAANEZ....), so perhaps there is
SOMETHING IN WHAT YOU SAY.
Anyway, if someone wants to record the song and wants to use the
ALTERNATIVE form of the lyrics, MORE POWER TO 'EM I SAY! Other minor or
major changes are also OK.